Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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work

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for the same

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all their working life.

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think that it is better to

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Coherence & Cohesion

Clarify your argument by providing a clear introduction that presents both sides of the discussion and clearly states your own opinion. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader.

Coherence & Cohesion

Develop your supporting points with specific examples and explanations. Avoid repeating the same ideas and strive for a variety of sentence structures.

Task Achievement

Address the task more fully by discussing both views presented in the prompt before stating your own opinion. Provide clear reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Task Achievement

Work on organizing your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should discuss a single main idea related to the prompt.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

244 words

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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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*In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is lack of a sense of community.* *What are the causes of this problem?* *How can it be solved?*

Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is lack of a sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?