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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data? summarize the information, and make a comparison.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data? summarize the information, and make a comparison.
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The two different pictures compare the two varieties of meals for dinner, encompassing medium baked potato and
macaroni
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 taking into account their nutritional contents. The result is prepared for the lecturers who work in the University.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that they are significantly consisting of different nutrient proportions, including carbohydrates, protein, sugar, fat, and others.
In contrast
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, those foods are one the same boat, in the case of carb levels, which is the biggest one. At the top level, carb contributes the highest percentage of the nutrition consistency to baked potato and
macaroni
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, 35% and 52%, respectively, with macarone's level being superior.
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, there is a considerable enhancement in
macaroni
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's saturated fatty acid when compared to a medium baked potato, accounting for 21%,
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 the latter contains only 10%.
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, the former could be better, regarding protein, glucose, and other nutrient presentations than the latter by 10%, 4%, and 10%, respectively. Interestingly,
macaroni
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 after being evaluated consists of a similar number between sugar and protein, reaching 11%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words macaroni with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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