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Novadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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With the increase in
food
 production in the civilized world. A lot of
food
 purchased from shops and
restaurants
 is wasted by
people
.
This
 essay will examine the reasons for wasting
food
 and suggest some solutions to control it. With the increased availability of
food
 in some countries of the world, the issue of
food
waste
 has emerged and become one of the main problems facing society. In the past,
food
 was one of the biggest problems that
people
 faced, but nowadays fast
food
 suffers from
this
 problem because fast
food
 is cheaper and available in almost all stores and
restaurants
.
In addition
, with the increasing interest in
food
 production,
people
 do not feel important.
Food
 preservation.
Also
, fast
food
restaurants
 are available everywhere and are almost free, creating a greater opportunity to
waste
food
. There are some solutions to stop wasting
food
.
First,
individuals must learn the great importance of having
food
 available and consuming only the right amount for each person.
Secondly
, governments must work out how to make use of wasted
food
,
such
 as reprocessing wasted
food
 into animal feed.
Last
 but not least, we impose some penalties on
people
 who intentionally
waste
food
, taking into account monitoring fast
food
restaurants
 to avoid wasting
food
.
In addition
 to the health problems resulting from eating fast
food
, which is almost devoid of any healthy elements for humans In conclusion, I believe that
government
Correct article usage
the government
show examples
 and
people
 should know the importance of not
waste
Wrong verb form
wasting
show examples
food
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
take
responsible
Replace the word
responsibility
show examples
 of stop
waste
food
 and
educating
Wrong verb form
educate
show examples
 young
people
 on the necessity of preserving
food
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste
  • bought
  • shops
  • restaurants
  • over-purchasing
  • improper storage
  • awareness
  • consequences
  • reckless behavior
  • aesthetic preferences
  • expiration dates
  • portion sizes
  • excess inventory
  • public awareness campaigns
  • education
  • food management
  • policies
  • regulations
  • curb
  • encouraging
  • community composting
  • donation programs
  • landfills
  • strategies
  • smaller portion sizes
  • discounted takeaway meals
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