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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given graph depicts information about the ratio of exports which was
delivering
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 to four different countries from
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Australia
austrailia
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Australia
 over
an
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a
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 22 years period between 1990 and 2012 after the analysis it is clearly stated that
japan
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Japan
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 was
largest
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the largest
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 consumer of
austrailian
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Australian
 goods at the
begining
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beginning
 of the year
nealy
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nearly
 25
million
then
 after five years period the number
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started
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 to decline hitting 20
million
of
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 exports after that, the same figure remained steadily
throughtout
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throughout
 the period between 1995 and 2012
in contrast
, china was second least consumer of
austrailian
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Australian
 goods
then
 after a decades spending on
products
 made by china inclined to 5
million
 in total.
in addition
,
this
 figure did not stop there and
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skyrocketed
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sky rocketed
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skyrocketed
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 to 25
million
thus
,
pattern
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the pattern
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 did not change the upward direction
furthermore
, in
first
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the first
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 decade (1990 to 2000) US spent a good sum of money on
austrailian
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Australian
products
then
 after which the spending
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 to
decreased
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decrease
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 rapidly in the next decade but after two years, a gradual
increased
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of using
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in use
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had been
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was
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 seen by
US
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the US
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resident
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.
on the other hand
,
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India
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india
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India
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 was
least
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the least
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 favourite
on
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for
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 using
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Aussie
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aussie
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Aussie
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products
 nearly negligible between 1990 to 2000
then
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Indians
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indians
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Indian
 consumers increased at
the
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an
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 alarming rate approximately 8
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million
mllion
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million
 exports in the second decade after which it
start
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started
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 to
decreased
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decrease
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overall
, it is vividly manifested that all four countries showed some fluctuations
although
china
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China
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 and
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India
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india
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India
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 were the least favourite at the
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beginning
begining
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beginning
 when using
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Australian
austrailian
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Australian
 goods
however
, japan and US
were
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showed a great interest
of
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in
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using
usiung
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using
 these
products
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words austrailian, million, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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