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In some places, old age is valued wile in other cultures youth is considered more important. Dicuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by many that some certain countries
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 available for old age,
whereas
others
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 cultures
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 that
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young
people
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 more important.
This
 essay agrees with the latter sentiment and lays out the reasoning below. There can be no doubt that youth are the major influence on the cultures through their ability to
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impact
 development and improvement to their country. Young
people
 are human
being
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 and good manners in any
culture
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 setting
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 always going to be a benefit to them. Teenagers can not only
use
 three physical
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 but can
also
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 mentally
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method
 to
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 their nation.
However
,
minority
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a minority
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 of
people
 believe that old ages
people
 would be more crucial and they can
use
 their long life
expereience
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experience
 to
helping
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country
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the country
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 which can be of a huge benefit to any
cultures
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culture
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.
Nevertheless
,
this
 data
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 to be
inerpreted
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interpreted
 correctly. Elders do not
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always
 have great physical and mental abilities to
use
 their knowledge for development, all the data could be wasted. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that.
In addition
, young
people
 require a lesson that the older teaching their important experience to the youth. A study in
UK
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 showed that when teenagers
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 learned all of
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experience
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 they can
use
 it better than the older, the number of teenagers
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 in using
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the elder
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elder
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older
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 method by some 70%, a significant
turn around
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