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You are visiting another town next month for a short break. Write a letter to the tourist information centre. In your letter: *Tell them how long you are staying *ask for some suggestions for what to do *find out if there are any local events happening at the time

#town #month #tourist #information #centre #*tell #*ask #suggestions #*find #events #time
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to request information about your
town
, I am visiting
to
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 a short break. In my
opinion
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 I
am linger
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 there
to
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for
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 seven or six days. I would like to ask for your proposal
to
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as to
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 what thing to do
at
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 your
town
. And I hope you can assist me with some activities. I think your
town
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have
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 many activities and
furthermore
, many sports.
Such
 as football, badminton and so on things. And I do love games like football. And I want
ro
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to
 inquire regarding any local occurrence at
this
 time. In the event
of
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 there is not any holiday,
but
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in my
opinion
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 every
town
 and country
have
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 many local events, so I want to find out about here is local events. In short, I guess I can do many interesting things,and I can see many places in
this
 short break.
However
 It
not
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 only enough for me but
also
 helps me
some
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relax.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Ashurov Sardor
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logical structure
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each bullet point, and a concise conclusion. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly addresses the bullet point, followed by supporting sentences.
greeting and closing
Use a more formal greeting and closing for letters to an unknown recipient. Consider using 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours sincerely,' respectively.
single idea per paragraph
Focus each paragraph on a single idea relevant to the bullet points in the task. Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs with linking words.
complete response
Make sure your letter fully addresses each point in the task. Include specific details or questions for each bullet point to provide a complete response.
suitable writing tone
Adopt a tone appropriate for a formal letter. Use polite requests and formal expressions. Avoid overly casual language or slang.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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