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A road near your home is damaged. Write a letter to the council of your town/city to complain about it. In your letter – Tell them who are you and where you live – Explain the nature of your complaint – Say what you would like them to do about it

#road #home #council #town #city #nature #complaint
Dear sir, I am writing to your
attentions
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 a pressing concern regarding the conditions of Queen
Road
 near my residence in Chacarilla, as a resident, I am deeply troubled by the deteriorating condition of the main load, which has posed a significant hazard to pedestrians and motorists in the area. The
road
 has numerous potholes, cracks and uneven surfaces that
leads
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 to serious
risk
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 to the
safety
 of those who use it daily. Not only does it
crear
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create
 a bumpy and uncomfortable ride for vehicles passing through, but it
also
increase
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 the likelihood of accidents and damage
of
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to
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 vehicles.
Furthermore
, the poor state of
road
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the road
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 has led to drainage issues during heavy rainfall, causing water to accumulate and creating additional
safety
hazard
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 to pedestrians and drivers. I
respectively
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 urge the council to take an immediate measure to address the issues and undertake the necessary repair to restore the
road
 to a
safety
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safe
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 and functional condition. It is pivotal that
maintenence
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maintenance
 work is carried out promptly to ensure the well-being of citizens and
commuter
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commuters
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 who rely on the
road
 for daily
travels
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. I kindly request that the relative authorities conduct a thorough inspection of Queen
Road
,
identifies
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 the area in need of repair, and
implementa
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implement
 a comprehensive plan to fix the
road
 promptly. By investing in the maintenance of our infrastructure,
as a
consequence
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 the residents can enhance the quality of life. I
apreciar
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appreciate
 your attention to
this
 matter and look forward to seeing positive changes that will benefit our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. Thank you for your commitment to ensuring the
safety
 and well-being of all
of
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commuters.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure every paragraph serves a unique purpose. While your letter exhibits a logical sequence, further clarification in each paragraph can enhance understanding.
task achievement
Pay attention to the accuracy of spelling, as spelling mistakes can distract from the message. 'crear' should be 'create', 'load' should be 'road', 'maintenence' should be 'maintenance', 'implementa' should be 'implement', and 'apreciar' should be 'appreciate'.
task achievement
Use a consistent tone throughout the letter. The tone chosen is mostly suitable, but ensure that it remains polite and official throughout, avoiding an overly casual approach.
task achievement
To improve task response, explicitly state your request or desired action early in the letter to immediately clarify the purpose to the reader.
coherence cohesion
For a more polished finish, close your letter formally with a valediction, such as 'Yours sincerely', followed by your name.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Municipal
  • Potholes
  • Asphalt deterioration
  • Congestion
  • Commuters
  • Preventative maintenance
  • Civic responsibility
  • Due diligence
  • Expedite
  • Safety hazards
  • Logistics
  • Accessibility
  • Rectify
  • Public welfare
  • Stakeholders
  • Proactive measures
  • Liaise
  • Acknowledgment
  • Constituent
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