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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the
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advantage
 of information technology,
communication
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became
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 easier than ever before.
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 some people believe that
this
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 is a positive development, others argue that it causes isolation and desocialisation. I completely agree with the former opinion as
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 of reasons are present to substantiate it.
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relevant
 illustrations. First and foremost, one of the obvious advantages of
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internet based
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internet-based
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communication
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 is
instant
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the instant
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 sharing of
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content
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.
In other words
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,
instent
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intense
 sharing of
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 from one geographical location to another within seconds.
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,
WhatsApp
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the WhatsApp
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 application
help
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 to share invitation
letter
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 of a program within
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minutes.
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, in the bygone days, it took several weeks to
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receipients
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recipients
.
Besides
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, social media has a significant role in modern
communication
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.
The friends
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 and relatives from different
part
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 of the world can connect through social media. Because
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this
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the
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social bonding would be
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 ever than before.
Furthermore
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,
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internet
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the internet
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became
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 a key role
for
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 educational
purpose
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purposes
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. connecting with students and teachers all around the world
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became
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 possible after the invention of the
internet
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. In detail, online education is
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commonplace among
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leaners
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learners
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the
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information
technology based
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technology-based
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communication
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.
In addition
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, the
internet
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 enables
real time
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 news to the viewers.
As a result
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, the people became more
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about
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 the political situation of the country and the world which would strengthen the
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democracy
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. In conclusion, the
internet
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 enables instant sharing of
contents
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content
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 and
connect
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connects
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 people from different geographical locations.
Moreover
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, it
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improve
improves
 accessibility not only for education but
also
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 for news. I believe
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internet
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Internet
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 is one of the greatest inventions in the
communication
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 industry.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure accurate use of English spelling, grammar, and punctuation to improve clarity and professionalism.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize the essay with clear paragraphs, including a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point.
Task Achievement
Support your main points with more detailed explanations and specific examples relevant to the topic. This will help to strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
Task Achievement
Revisit the topic statement to ensure that your essay directly addresses the question. Your introduction should clearly state your position, and the conclusion should summarise your main points and restate your viewpoint.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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