The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
the given table depicts information about
hours
and minutes which were spent by UK residents Use synonyms
for
their daily different activities
after the analysis, it is clearly stated that sleep for average men and women took huge Change preposition
on
time
accounting for eight Use synonyms
hours
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
for
eating and drinking took almost one Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
hours
in their daily routines Change to a singular noun
hour
moreover
, Linking Words
time
spent on leisure Use synonyms
activity
both Fix the agreement mistake
activities
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
such
as watching and listening hold Linking Words
significant
portion of almost three Add an article
a significant
hours
whilst social life and entertainment maintained a second spot of their daily routines the rest of the activity hold a smaller portion on wasting their Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
furthermore
, there was one hour difference between men and women for Linking Words
Correct your spelling
employment
employement
and study Correct your spelling
employment
similarly
, for housework Linking Words
female
consume most of their Fix the agreement mistake
females
time
but for traveling both spent equal Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
however
, for childcare and other Linking Words
day to day
activities did notAdd a hyphen
day-to-day
a
major portion of their Add a missing verb
have a
time
Use synonyms
overall
, it is vividly manifested that for all leisure activities done by them per day, men spent most of their energy Linking Words
while
sleep remained Linking Words
top
activity done by them equallyCorrect article usage
the top
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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