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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The frame above illustrates figures in three states in the United States. The features are age, average income per person, and
population
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 beneath the
povery
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poverty
 limit. The states are
California
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,
Utah
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 and
Florida
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. Concerning age,
Utah
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 has the highest rate of young people, about 28% of their
population
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,
whereas
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Florida
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 has the highest
percentege
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percentage
 of people over 60 years (23%).
Utah
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 has almost a third of its
population
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 over 60 years when compared to
Florida
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.
California
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 depicts intermediate numbers in both ranges (under 18 and over 60). Analysing the average amount earned per person,
California
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 has the greatest value ($ 23.000), followed by
Florida
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 ($ 22.000), and
Utah
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 ($ 17.000) is in the
last
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 position among the three administrative regions. The difference between
California
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 and
Florida
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 is only $1.000. Despite the fact that
California
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 has a good income per person,
this
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 state presents the worst percentage of people with insufficient resources to survive (16%).
On the other hand
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,
Utah
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 has a lower mean income per
indivudual
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individual
,
however
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, shows a better performance
on
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population
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 above poverty, about 9%, when compared to
California
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 and
Florida
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 (12%).
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