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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oíl resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oíl resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the percentage of the total number of fossil fuels available and the same consumed by
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people in different parts of the globe.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the Middle East is the major producer of the total number of
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oil
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 reserves,
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 these
oil
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 fuels are mainly consumed by the United States and Asia.
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Australia and New Zealand are the least producers of petrol and diesel with a figure of 0.30%.
On the other hand
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, approximately the same amount of
oil
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 around 1.57% is produced by the United States and Western
Europe
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whereas
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Eastern
Europe
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 and Africa
contributes
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 nearly 6.48% to the world's total fuel reserves.
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, the Canada and Middle East are the biggest sources of
oil
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 generation with
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respective figures of 14.84% and 56.52%. With regard to
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the world's
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 total
resources
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resource
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 consumption,
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Asia,
United
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the United
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 States and Western
Europe
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 consumes the natural resources most with the corresponding figures of 26.21%, 25.48% and 19.24%. The percentage of
oil
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Eastern
Europe
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,
Middle
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 East and Central and South America is roughly 6.48% which is exactly
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double
of
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that of
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 Africa's
oil
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 consumption.
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,
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Canada, Australia and New Zealand
seems
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 to be more eco-friendly as they are less
dependenet
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dependent
 upon natural reserves.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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