The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010.
The chart shows the percentage of people who
use
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used
diffrent
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different
facilities
of
their Change preposition
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phone
between 2006 and 2010.
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phones
Overall
,every prenctage
used of Correct your spelling
percentage
facilities
of Correct article usage
the facilities
phone
increase
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increased
significtanly
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significantly
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things Change preposition
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make
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playing
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a 1
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at Add a missing verb
is still
top
of the rate of Correct article usage
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phone
usage with 99 percent
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per cent
at
2010.
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in
send
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sending
recieve
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receiving
massages
, it is the second most used Correct your spelling
messages
phones
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phone facility
facilities
and has grown by 6% from 2006 ,it trasformed
from 73% to 79% Correct your spelling
transformed
at
2010.
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in
search
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searching
internt
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Internet
record
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recording
video
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videos
while
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achieved
respecfully
to 41% and 9% in 2008 and Correct your spelling
respectfully
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numbers made huge Correct pronoun usage
those
diffrences
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differences
difference
and
they Correct word choice
apply
reach
attentively to 73% and 35%.
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reached
this
period like most uses of phone
features , play
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playing
game
and Fix the agreement mistake
games
take
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taking
photo
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photos
complling
increase politely from 17% and 66% to 26% and 76% at Correct your spelling
compelling
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end
of Correct article usage
the end
period
.
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the period
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saw Correct article usage
the phone
downward
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a downward
but
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apply
facilities
of phone
increased Correct article usage
the phone
significatly
from 2006 to 2010.Correct your spelling
significantly
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