The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of money spent in the United Kingdom by tourists over a 30-year period and the pie charts show
percentage
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the percentage
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of four different reasons which led the visitors to
going
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to the country in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, spent money by overseas visitors had
steadly
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steadily
steady
increase through the period. The motivations,
however
, presented
lightly
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difference between the two observed years. As we can see, the amount of money spent by foreign visitors increased from £7,500 to £10.600 in a period of thirty years, from 1980 to 2010, with a large peak in 1996. Another interesting data
is concerning
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the reasons which led people
going
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to go
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to the UK. Holiday was the main reason for visits in 1980 and 2010, presenting in the latter year a decrease
by
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5%.
On the other hand
, visiting friends or relatives, and business totalised almost 40% together in 80's. In 2010,
however
, they amounted to 50%. Other reasons which made people
visiting
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UK
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the UK
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decreased by almost 6% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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