You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter: ●Describe the problem with the equipment ●Explain what happened when you phoned the shop ●Say what you would like the manager to do

Dear Sir/Madam, Hi , My name is Mohit and I am writing
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letter to seek your attention
in
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my
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problem which I am facing after buying
clothes
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a clothes
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dryer from your shop.
Dryer
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The dryer
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is not working
good
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well
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. It's not drying the clothes even using for an hour, clothes remain wet even after that. I called on shop about
this
problem but no action was taken by customer service. They just said we will send
mechanic
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for it. I am waiting for their
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for their response and now they are not answering my calls. I would like you to please personally check where
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the problem is. I bought
new
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a new
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one which has both
warranty
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a warranty
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and
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a guarante
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guarante
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guarantee
. You can check with your employees or please replace
this
machine with
other
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another
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one if possible. I
will
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would
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really appreciate it. I am waiting for your response. Please take action as soon as possible.
Your
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faithfully Mohit
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a distinct aspect of your issue. For example, one paragraph for describing the problem, another for your experience with customer service, and a final one for the action you desire.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your opening and closing lines could be made more formal and suited to a letter format. Begin with 'Dear [Manager's Name or Shop Name],' if known, and conclude with 'Yours sincerely,' followed by your full name, to maintain a professional tone.
Task Achievement
For a stronger task response, ensure that each part of the prompt is addressed fully. While you've addressed all parts, expanding on each point with more detail and clarity could enhance your response. Specifically, describe the equipment and the issue in more detail, elaborate on the conversation with customer service, and specify clearly the action you want the manager to take.
Task Achievement
Consider the tone of your letter to ensure it's appropriately formal for writing to a manager. Avoid casual phrases and ensure the language you use is polite yet assertive, to convey your issue effectively while being respectful.
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