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You are working for a company.You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this: Write a letter to your manager.In your letter . explain why you want to take time off work . give details of the amount of time you need . suggest how your work could be covered you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you.That I will not be able to come
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work
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to work
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 for
few
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a few
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days
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. As you know I have a big family and I can not spend my
time
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 with them for a long
time
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 because of the
work
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.I
work
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 here for
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a full
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full
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full-time
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time
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 job.In my opinion
that is
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main
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 purpose that I am not with them. After one month we have a special traditional holiday.
In
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this
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 holiday we should be together for
long
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 period of
time
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 approximately 40
days
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.
Fortunately
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unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances will not happen
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 I am
in
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on
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days
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 off.
Becouse
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Because
 I have already done my
work
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 which your company require.
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Nonetheless
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 if there
will be
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 problems I will keep in touch with you online. And
also
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 my friend will charge of my
work
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while
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 I am
in
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on
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vocation
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vacation
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 with my family. I would like to get
a
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a day
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days
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 off for these things.And I am sure
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 situation will not happen again. I would be grateful if you let me through
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 event I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Your
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 faithfully Nurbek
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task achievement
Be specific about the reasons for requesting time off to strengthen the task response. Instead of mentioning a big family and a traditional holiday, clarify how this affects you personally and why this time off is crucial for you.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph has a specific purpose and progresses logically. The introduction should clearly state your intent, followed by a paragraph explaining your reasons in more detail, another discussing the duration needed and how work can be covered, and finally a polite closing.
coherence cohesion
Improve the greeting and closing by using a more personalized approach if you know the manager's name, or maintaining the formal 'Dear Sir/Madam' if not. 'Your faithfully' is slightly incorrect; use 'Yours faithfully' instead when the recipient is not known by name.
task achievement
To increase the letter's effectiveness, directly address how your absence will be managed. Mentioning a colleague who can cover your duties is a good start, but outline a brief plan for how this will be coordinated to ensure a smoother transition.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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