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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The information which has been provided by
this
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 graph illustrates the global
water
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consumption
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 in three various branches over a period of 100 years from 1990 to 2000 and the table highlights the
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 and Congo. On the whole, what is inferred from the mentioned graph is that figures are in the sore trend in terms of
consumption
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 in every single sector and data in the table shows that
Brazil
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 has had more population, land and
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 much more
water
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consumption
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. With a glance at the provided graph, in 1900, cultivation had the highest proportion of
consumption
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 with roughly 500 Km3, and
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 trend has witnessed a tremendous leap to 3000 in 2000. Industrial use of
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 was approximately next to nothing in 1990,
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, there was a rocket surge to 1000 Km3 in 2000. Domestic utilization of
water
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 followed a comparable pattern with the industrial realm in which in 1990, domestic use virtually was an eligible percentage,
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, akin to industrial usage has seen a strikingly soar to 500 in 2000
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, it was the least fraction of
water
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 exploitation among these subdivisions. To respect the table,
brazil
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 had a population of around 176 million with 26.500 Km2 arable fields in 2000. Congo had 5.2 million people and approximately 4 times more irrigated land in comparison with
Brazil
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.
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,
water
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consumption
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 per individual in
Brazil
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 was 45 times
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more than in Congo with 359 and 8 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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