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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pictures illustrate how an industrial region in
the
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Norbiton looks now ,and how it will be in the future.
Overall
, it can be seen that many features will be added after
development
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 of the area.
In addition
, it is noticeable that all the
facrories
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factories
 will be removed. At the moment, there are just factory sites in the area, which are
aound
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around
 the
aquare
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square
 and path. In the future, there is no sign of any factory,
while
, there are several housing in the place.
Also
, many amenities will be added
such
 as a medical centre, a playground, a school, and shops. On the other side of the river, there is just
a
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farmland, but it will be moved
further
 east, and its position will be filled with paths and housing area. Now, there is no bridge to
accross
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cross
across
along
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the river,
hence
, by improvements, a route will be located on the width of the river.
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