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The graph below shows information about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure below illustrates which languages have been chosen to
study
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 in one school since 2000 to the present by 13-year-old
students
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.
overall
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 who were interested in learning French was dramatically going down from 2000 to 2005, the figure for the
students
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 who chose to
study
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Mandarin
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 sharply increased during the same period. It can be seen from the graph that the
number
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 of
students
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 choosing to
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 French experienced a peak at 150 in 2000 and fluctuated between 90 to 100 from 2005 to the present.
However
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, the rate of
students
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 who preferred to
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Mandarin
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 climbed enormously to a peak of circa 75 from 2000 until 2005 and
then
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 fell slightly to 65 twice in 2006 and 2008.
Although
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 the main trend of
students
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 who selected the French language is descending, it still is the highest in comparison to the
students
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 who chose
Mandarin
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. It means that the lowest
number
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 of French
language
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 is about 90
students
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 which is higher than the peak of
students
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 learning
Mandarin
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 by 15
students
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. It is noticeable that both language selections changed by the same
number
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 but in a vice versa trend.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, students, number, mandarin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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