A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible • disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Husan
How are you bro? I heard from your brother you want to camping
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Actually
your idea about camping is brilliant. Add a comma
Actually,
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there are some disadvantages. Add a comma
actually,
Firstly
on a camping holiday
you must be careful because there are a lot of wild animals like bears wolves and others. You must Add a comma
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to
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you
and your family and Correct pronoun usage
yourself
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you
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coach
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two storey
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pieces of advice
bits of advice
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Yours sincerely
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea and be linked using appropriate transitional phrases.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve your greeting and closing, try to use more formal or varied expressions. For example, 'Dear Husan,' is good, but 'Yours sincerely' could be followed by your full name for a more complete closing.
Task Achievement
Increase the level of detail in your response. While you mentioned advantages and disadvantages, try to expand on these with more specific examples or personal experiences. Additionally, directly address all the points in the prompt more clearly.
Task Achievement
Work on using a more suitable and consistent tone throughout your letter. Consider the relationship with the recipient and the purpose of your letter to guide your language choice.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.