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The two maps display a future plan of university sports centre and how it will change.

The two maps display a future plan of university sports centre and how it will change.
The
two
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 maps display a future plan
of
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for
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university
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the university
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sports
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 centre and how it will change.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
sports
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 building will have a
signifiecant
Correct your spelling
significant
 redevelopment.
while
Linking Words
gym
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the gym
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, reception, and changing room will be the same, the center will
get
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be
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 expanded in size of
two
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 outdoor courts. Recently, the
sports
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 centre location is in between,
two
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 outdoor courts. In the main door you will face the reception, to the east and the west there
is
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are
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 a
two
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entrencs
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entrances
entrance
. The pool is
on
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in
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 the middle with
25
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a 25
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m length.
However
Linking Words
, it will expand in the future, the outdoor
courts
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court
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 building will
reconstructor
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be reconstructor
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 to join the main centre.
Firstly
Linking Words
in
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on
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the
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apply
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both sides of the entrance there is a cafe
in
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on
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 the east and a
sports
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 shop
in
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on
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 the west.
In addition
Linking Words
, it will have another pool in the west next to the old changing room.
Moreover
Linking Words
, it will be
two
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 extra changing
room
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rooms
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, one
is
Wrong verb form
will be
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 next to the leisure pool and the other one
it
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apply
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will face the new
sports
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 hall.
While
Linking Words
 the old gym is going to be bigger. The
last
Linking Words
 thing is the
two
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 dancing studios
in
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on
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 the east side.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, sports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "display" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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