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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given figures illustrate the sources of income and the relative allocation of
Britians´
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Britain´
 police budget in 2017 and 2018 separately.
Overall
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, the national revenue
are
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apply
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mainly
came
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comes
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 from
national
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the national
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goverment
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government
governments
, local taxes and other sources eg.
grants
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of grants
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.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
fond
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fund
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 was spent
in
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on
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 the payment of wages for officers and staff, technology development and buildings and transport construction. As can be seen, the main payment was poured into the salary
to
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of
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 staff. Upon initial observation, the total amount of national income increased
almost
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by almost
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 13.9
millions
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million
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 achieving 318.6 million in 2018 compared with the
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last
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previous
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 year. The most significant is local taxes,
arise
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rising
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 to 102.3 from 91.2 million in 2017,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the
remain
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remaining
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 two categories go through slight changes. In terms of
the
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apply
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spending, the investment in building and transport disposed of the same share in both mentioned years.
conversely
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, the technology item doubled its proportion to 14%
in
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of
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 the total amount of investment, replacing the previous one as the second main expenditure in 2018.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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