The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figures illustrate the sources of income and the relative allocation of
Britians´
police budget in 2017 and 2018 separately.
Correct your spelling
Britain´
Overall
, the national revenue are
mainly Unnecessary verb
apply
came
from Wrong verb form
comes
national
Correct article usage
the national
goverment
, local taxes and other sources eg. Correct your spelling
government
governments
grants
. Change preposition
of grants
On the other
hand
the Add a comma
hand,
fond
was spent Correct your spelling
fund
in
the payment of wages for officers and staff, technology development and buildings and transport construction. As can be seen, the main payment was poured into the salary Change preposition
on
to
staff.
Upon initial observation, the total amount of national income increased Change preposition
of
almost
13.9 Change preposition
by almost
millions
achieving 318.6 million in 2018 compared with the Change to singular
million
last
year. The most significant is local taxes, Correct word choice
previous
arise
to 102.3 from 91.2 million in 2017, Verb problem
rising
meanwhile
the Add a comma
meanwhile,
remain
two categories go through slight changes. In terms of Change the form of the verb
remaining
the
spending, the investment in building and transport disposed of the same share in both mentioned years. Correct article usage
apply
conversely
, the technology item doubled its proportion to 14% in
the total amount of investment, replacing the previous one as the second main expenditure in 2018.Change preposition
of
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