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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the percentages of the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, which is a
visiters
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visitor
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 survey. On the whole, about the rate of the most common advantages, the people is the highest , followed by the
scenary
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scenery
, good accommodation,
culture
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and culture
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. And Speaking of the proportion of the most
commondisadvantages
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common disadvantages
,
high
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the high
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 cost of living is the highest, followed by entertainment, food quality,and weather. One of the most notable
thing
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things
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 about the most common
adavantages
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advantages
 thing is that the proportion of the people and the scenery are higher than other reasons. Specifically, the
perecentage
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percentage
 of the people is at 42%, and the scenery is at 35%. The next noticeable thing revealed by the data is that
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high cost of living accounts for the highest proportion of the most common
disadventages
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disadvantages
. Looking more closely, the percentage of high cost of living is recorded at 50%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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