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Write a letter to your local government about increasing the number of recycling bins. - say current availability of recycling bins - why they are important - request more recycling bins

#government #bins #availability #request
Dear sir I am writing
this
 letter to request for more recycling
bins
. So
government
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 should
to take
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 a
solve
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 to
this
 problem. Nowadays increasing
of
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apply
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pollution in the big cities.
Also
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this
 action can affect
to
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people's health system who
living
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 in the city.
Firstly
 many big cities produce big size of rubbish. So
streets
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being
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are
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 very dirty in the city.
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this
 action
affecting
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affects
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 to animals
life
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style
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lifestyles
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.
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 many wild animals
dieing
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die
 under the rubbish. So
government
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the government
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 should
to
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apply
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find a
solve
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solution
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 to
this
problum
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problem
. I think
government
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the government
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 should
to growth
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grow
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 more recycling
bins
. Because
this
 machine can refine to rubbish.
Also
 recycling
bins
 do not dirty to streets of
city
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the city
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. I believe that
people
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 future will be better
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or worst
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worst
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,
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apply
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 if
government
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the government
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 do not
product
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produce
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 more recycling
bins
. Thank
in
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you in
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 advance. I look forward to getting your reply soon. Respectfully yours. Alan Gordon
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greeting and closing
Address the local government or council more specifically rather than using 'Dear sir', which is too general. Consider using 'Dear [Local Government/Council Name]' for a more targeted approach.
logical structure
Organize your ideas more clearly and logically. Start with an introduction about the issue, follow up with paragraphs each dedicated to a separate point (current situation, importance of recycling bins, and your request), and conclude with a summary or a final appeal for action.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph discusses a single idea. For example, one paragraph can focus on current availability, another on why recycling bins are important, and the last one on your request for more bins. This structure helps the reader follow your argument more easily.
complete response
Your letter should directly address the task, making a clear request for more recycling bins while providing a rationale for this request. Include specific examples or data to support your points, and directly ask for an increase in recycling bins by stating how this will benefit the community.
suitable writing tone
Adopt a suitable tone for writing to a government authority. This involves being respectful and formal, using correct titles and not being too informal or casual in your language. Avoid colloquial expressions and ensure your grammar and spellings are accurate to maintain professionalism.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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