You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your tree time while you are in Australia

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Dear

madam

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Madam

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, I am writing

this

letter in response to an advertisement, published

last

week

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one of the leading

Australia

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Australian

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family

magazine

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magazines

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,where you asked for a

short term

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short-term

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live-in caregiver for your six-year-old

child

.I have

proper

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experience to take the best

care

of your

child

and I would like to take the job. I am confident that I would be able to render a great service in taking

care

of your

child

since I have had

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good experience in raising a couple of young siblings as the eldest

child

of my family.

Besides

,I love children

sice

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since

I consider them as a bundle of joy ,and

that is

why I took

care

of some young children as a babysitter in my hometown.In fact, I find children so special that I have taken a short online course on parenting so that I could relate to them in a better way. By the way, I recently

come

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to visit Australia from my home country at the invitation of my uncle in order to live with him for the next six months or so. And,

while

I am in Australia I would

also

love to explore

this

beautiful country and learn about the lifestyle and culture of its people

in addition

to taking

care

of your

child

should you choose to offer me the job. Sincerely MRS.Chi

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greeting and closing

Begin with a more engaging and personalized greeting, such as 'Dear Mr. and Mrs. [Last Name],' to make a strong initial connection.

logical structure

Structure your paragraphs clearly, starting with an introductory sentence and following it up with supporting details. This will improve the logical flow of your letter.

single idea per paragraph

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity. For example, dedicate individual paragraphs to why you're interested in the job, your qualifications, and your plans while in Australia.

complete response

To fully meet the task response, provide more specific examples of your previous childcare experience. Share anecdotes or specific skills that make you suitable for the role.

suitable writing tone

Adopt a more formal tone suitable for a job application. Avoid colloquial expressions and ensure the usage of proper salutations and closings.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

225 words

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