The bar chart below shows the amount spent on different types of advertising in the USA in 2003 and 2004. The table shows the six sectors which spent the most on advertising in the USA in 2003 and 2004.

The bar chart below shows the amount spent on different types of advertising 

in the USA in 2003 and 2004. The table shows the six sectors which spent the 

most on advertising in the USA in 2003 and 2004.
The given bar graph the
amount
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various
kind
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of publicity in the USA the six
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which spent the most on ralation over a 1
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between 2003 and 2004. It can be seen from the graph that ,in 2003 and 2004, the
amount
of
money
paid to run advertising by local newspapers was the highest among the groups, but the
amount
of
money
paid by network radio stations was the lowest. In general,
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the
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there are a total of 6 industries, but 4 industries still maintain the highest ranking and
that is
the automobile industry, and 2 industries financial services and food
beverages
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and beverages
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to change. It is evident that between 2003 and 2004, local newspapers received the largest amounts of advertising funding—22
billion
and 24
billion
, respectively.
Conversely
, Network radio allocated the smallest
amount
of
money
to promotion—just $1
billion
a year between 2003 and 2004. Local radio and national newspapers spent less than $10
billion
,
whereas
magazines and Network TV spent about the same
amount
of
money
. Between 2003 and 2004, the top four ranking sectors stayed unchanged, with automotive continuing to be ranked first and retail coming in second. Food and beverages fall to sixth place, and Financial Services rises to the top 5 from the top 6.
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