The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows various
type
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types
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of industries
proportion
in
Brazil
's
economy
in 2009 and 2019 with a projection for 2029.
Firstly
, Finance was
on
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the top in terms of percentage of
Brazil
's
economy
in 2009 at around 30%. It
then
had a slight increase to just above 35% in 2019.
Subsequently
, in 2029, the industry keep the majority of the share with approximately 40%.
Secondly
, tourism and oil, coal and gas were the second largest contributing
industry
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industries
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of
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Brazil
's
economy
with a total
around
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25% in 2009. In 2019, it decreased a bit to around 20%. The industry remained steady in projection 2029.
On the other hand
, Oil, coal and gas rose its contribution to just above 30%. After that, the
proportion
was projected
had
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a dip and back to its beginning value in 2029. Of the other industries, the
proportion
of
Brazil
's
economy
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. The total
proportion
was less than 25%. It was expected to have less than 10% in 2029.
Overall
, Finance
was
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led the competition among other industries in
term
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terms
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of contributing to
Brazil
's
economy
.
Conversely
, oil, coal and gas
was
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the second.
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