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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows various
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 of industries
proportion
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 in
Brazil
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's
economy
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 in 2009 and 2019 with a projection for 2029.
Firstly
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, Finance was
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 the top in terms of percentage of
Brazil
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's
economy
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 in 2009 at around 30%. It
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 had a slight increase to just above 35% in 2019.
Subsequently
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, in 2029, the industry keep the majority of the share with approximately 40%.
Secondly
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, tourism and oil, coal and gas were the second largest contributing
industry
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industries
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of
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Brazil
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's
economy
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 with a total
around
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 25% in 2009. In 2019, it decreased a bit to around 20%. The industry remained steady in projection 2029.
On the other hand
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, Oil, coal and gas rose its contribution to just above 30%. After that, the
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 was projected
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 a dip and back to its beginning value in 2029. Of the other industries, the
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 of
Brazil
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economy
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was fluctuated
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. The total
proportion
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 was less than 25%. It was expected to have less than 10% in 2029.
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, Finance
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led the competition among other industries in
term
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 of contributing to
Brazil
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's
economy
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.
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, oil, coal and gas
was
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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