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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The four pie charts illustrate the proportion of
food
budget
 spent on
restaurant
meals
 and home cooking for every family from 1970 to 2000 and the line graph displays different numbers of
meals
 taken in fast
food
 and
sitdown
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sit-down
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 restaurants from 1970 to 2000 respectively. As the charts show, the rate of
restaurant
meals
'
budget
 occupied 10% and the rate of home cooking's
budget
 took up 90% in 1970, followed by the proportion of money spent on canteen
meals
 was 15% in 1980. After the proportion of their
food
budget
 spent on
meals
outdoor
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 for every family occupied 35%, it hit
a
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an
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 equal point, which means that the rate of
restaurant
meals
'
budget
 and home cooking's
budget
 were the same in 2000. When it comes to the linear graph, the
number
 of
meals
 taken in fast
food
 canteen and the
number
 of
sitdown
restaurant
meals
 started at the same point, which is 20 in 1970.
Then
 the
amount
 of
sitdown
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sit-down
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restaurant
meals
 surpassed the
amount
 of fast
food
meals
 to about 33% in 1980.
However
, the
amount
 of take-away
food
meals
 grew faster than the
amount
 of
sitdown
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sit-down
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restaurant
meals
 to around 53% in 1990, before the
number
 of take-away
food
meals
 ascended to around 90% in 2000. To summarise, the percentage of
food
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the food
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budget
 spent on canteen
meals
 and the
number
 of fast
food
 and
sitdown
restaurant
meals
 all revealed
a
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an
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 increasing trajectory.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, budget, restaurant, meals, sitdown, number, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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