question: The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps illustrate some changes that will be developed in the Norbiton industrial
area
.
In generall
, Correct your spelling
general
it is clear that
there are some modifications will
come in Correct pronoun usage
that will
an
industrial Correct article usage
the
area
of Norbiton city namely playground
, school, Correct article usage
the playground
shops
Correct word choice
and shops
although
the river
and town will never changed
.
To start with, currently, Change the verb form
change
be changed
Norbiton
industrial region Correct article usage
the Norbiton
is consisted
Wrong verb form
consists
by
a Change preposition
of
river
, which is flowed
throughout at north side and there is a band Wrong verb form
flows
at
Change preposition
in
northeast
Add an article
the northeast
area
. Moreover
, at
the middle of the Change preposition
apply
area
has
a roundabout and it creates two Verb problem
is
path
. One is on Change to a plural noun
paths
right
of Add an article
the right
roundabout
and Add an article
the roundabout
a roundabout
other
one is at Correct article usage
the other
south
site Add an article
a south
the south
that
is added with Correct pronoun usage
which
long
path which is located throughout the south Add an article
the long
a long
area
.
According to
the proposal, only town
will remain not relocated from the original side. The most significant Correct article usage
the town
developed
will be between Replace the word
development
river
and Add an article
the river
long
path. A medical Correct article usage
the long
center
will be constructed Change the spelling
centre
at
Change preposition
apply
southeast
of Add an article
the southeast
roundabout
and shops shall Add an article
the roundabout
a roundabout
have been
located opposite of Medical Wrong verb form
be
center
. Change the spelling
centre
Moreover
, in the future plan, a playground and school will be constructed south of the River
where
has a band. Correct word choice
which
In addition
, people will live at
Change preposition
in
southwest
corner where Add an article
the southwest
is
a factory now. Correct pronoun usage
there is
Although
a bridge will be built middle of the industry.Submitted by bahram.azizzade on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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