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Band 4.5

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job Say what else you could do for the family Guve your reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Sir or Madam Hope you are doing well. I am writing in response to an advertisement
wich
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 was placed in
local
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 newspaper about a teacher that you are looking for your children to teach
English
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 language. Let me explain why I think that I am the most suitable person for
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 job.
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, at the moment, I am
studiying
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studying
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 a university
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 not far from your house. So, I am a student and I can get on well with any child because I have a really good experience with that.
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, I want to mention that I can take care of your children too. I know that you are so busy nowadays because of your job, but that's not a problem as I can spend
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time with your children and give them
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really good knowledge. I really want
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 job because after finishing
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university I want to open my previous learning
center
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, so it will help me
developing
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 my teaching skills. Please contact me at any time should you wish to arrange a meeting.
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Your
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 sincerely Pulat

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task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task clearly. Your letter should clearly explain why you are suitable, what else you can offer, and your reasons for wanting the job. While you touched on all points, providing more detail, especially on your language teaching skills and specific reasons for wanting the job, would improve your response.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your letter. Connect your ideas more smoothly by using a variety of conjunctions and cohesive devices. This will help the reader to follow your points more easily.
coherence cohesion
It's important to review the accuracy of your writing, including spelling and grammar. For example, 'wich' should be 'which', 'studiying' should be 'studying', and 'a time' should be 'time'. Correcting these errors will improve the professionalism of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Personalize your closing by signing off with your full name. Also, consider using a more appropriate greeting for an advertisement response, such as 'Dear Hiring Manager', unless a name is provided in the ad.
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