You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend In your letter: • describe the vacation spot you have chosen • explain how you plan to spend your time there • invite your friend to join you on your vacation
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to complain about
vacation
Correct article usage
a vacation
for
relax. Because I am really hard work in my job.
The first problem is I don't have any example Change preposition
to
for chose
Change preposition
to choose
however
I have variant
for Add an article
a variant
go
vacation. Every people called "Snowman's Mountain". Verb problem
apply
This
hotel on
the mountain and inexpensive for every family and friends group. And exactly I want to ski Add a missing verb
is on
on
the snow. I hope the snow has not melted
Two days ago I saw my old friend a he told me about that hotel. After Change preposition
in
that
I thought about myself. Why should I not think about myselfAdd a comma
that,
.
I am just Change the punctuation
?
workaholic
person Correct article usage
a workaholic
in addition
. I ought to go to the mountain. I think I will have a lot of free time for any activity for example
ski
Wrong verb form
skiing
on
the snow and play Change preposition
in
snowball
. It will be awesome I think
If you have Fix the agreement mistake
snowballs
a
free time Correct article usage
apply
due to
you are like me you and I Change preposition
apply
just
Add a missing verb
are just
workaholic
Fix the agreement mistake
workaholics
persons
. Replace the word
people
Furthermore
you can find what you are looking for. And Add a comma
Furthermore,
this
activities enhance our ski skills.
I Change the determiner
these
am wait
for your answer and if you have any idea just call me without to postpone
Change the verb form
am waiting
Your
faithfully
JacobCorrect the word
Yours
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Task Achievement
Make sure to directly address the task given. In this letter, the task was to write to a friend about a vacation spot you have chosen, how you plan to spend your time, and invite your friend. However, the content seems to focus more on your decision to take a vacation and less on the specific details asked for.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your ideas more clearly. Start with an introduction to the topic, then move on to describe the vacation spot, how you plan to spend your time there, and finally, make your invitation to your friend. This logical flow will make your letter more coherent.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. For example, one paragraph can describe the vacation spot, another can explain your activities, and a final paragraph can contain the invitation to your friend. This will make your letter easier to follow.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter does not completely match what is expected in a letter to a friend. It is somewhat formal and distant. Try using more personal and conversational language to make your letter sound more friendly and inviting.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.
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