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The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps illustrate the changes that have taken place at the Science and Technology
Museum
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 since its construction in 1996 until 2016.
Overall
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, the
museum
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 has expanded and constructed, resulting
new
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in new
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 and modernise buildings,
along with
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 a new
area
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 in
parking
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the parking
a parking
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 lot. At the outset of the period, there were only seven
museum
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 areas with a spacious car park. Meanwhile, over the next two decades, there
were
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was
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 an increase
of
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in
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 the
room
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 variety to ten and a divide
of
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in
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 the parking
area
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 for
car
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cars
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 and
bicycle
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bicycles
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. The expansion of the main establishment
were
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was
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 built to accommodate the VR
room
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 beside the library and the construction of a new small building behind the parking zone
were
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was
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 constructed to be a Solar Wind
area
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.
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, most of the old spaces that
exist
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existed
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 in 1996 were moved and replaced by a new functional place. With the appearance of new
zone
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zones
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such
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 as 3D Cinema and VR
room
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, there
were
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was
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also
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 a replacement of the
area
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 including
Cafe
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a Cafe
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, Print
Room
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, and Diesel Engine Exhibition that became
Restaurant
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a Restaurant
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, Digital
Techonology
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Technology
Room
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 and Computers.
Library
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The library
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 and Reception were the
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area
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areas
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 that
are
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were
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 expanded and slightly moved to the nearest
area
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 of the
museum
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.
Whereas
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, the only spot that remained over
20-year
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20 years of
 development was the Steam Engine Exhibition.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, area, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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