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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of fuel as a source of energy
consuming
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 in the USA.
These information
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include
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includes
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 the proportion of the petrol and oil, coal, nuclear, solar and wind, and hydropower from the year 1980 to 2030.
Overall
, despite some fluctuations, the usage of any type of these resources
have
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 been predicted to increase,
however
, the ratio of
that is
 much higher in petrol and oil
in contrast
 to hydropower which
is
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aproximately
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approximately
remain
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remains
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 constant .
Petrole
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Petrol
 and oil, in 1980, have the highest range of utilization by the number of 35,
moreover
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this
 amount will reach the peak of
diagram
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the diagram
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 by the year 2030 to 50.
Likewise
, coal is the second energy source which has the most
raise
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 from the nearly 16 to 30.
On the other hand
, nuclear, solar ,and wind have less rate climb in the graph.
By comparison
,
this
 growth is much more in nuclear one ratio of nearly 3 number. At
last
, having no dramatic changes and some fluctuations, hydropower was
pridicted
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predicted
 to reach less than 5 in 2030.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • trend
  • consumption
  • projections
  • slow growth
  • advancements
  • efficiency
  • acceleration
  • underscoring
  • expanding economy
  • household demands
  • trajectory
  • technological advancements
  • population growth
  • standards of living
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable energy policies
  • environmental impacts
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