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 The bar chart illustrates how the proportion of accessing news of people were in different sources in a country changed from 2013 to 2017.

 The bar chart illustrates how the proportion of accessing news of people were in different sources in a country changed from 2013 to 2017.
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, it can be seen that
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television
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is by
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 far the most
papular
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popular
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media
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medium
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 to access news
while
rate
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the rate
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 of accessing radio remained stable during
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the period
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.
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 there is a wide disparity in the amount of Five media accessed news .the popular media
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television
that
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contribute
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 the largest rate in 2013 ,
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 80% and experienced
slight
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a slight
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 fall in 2015 and 2017 at 68 % and 70% respectively.The tendency
of reading
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 newspapers started
with
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 40% and there was
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a dramatic
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dramatic
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decreased
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,at 30% and 20%
while
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contribution
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the contribution
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 listening to
radio
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the radio
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 did not change and
stay
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 at 30% during
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the period
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.The using of
Internet
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the Internet
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 in all
devises
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 experienced
dramatically
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a dramatically
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 upward trend over a period
while
this
 popularity
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 at 30% and reached a peak
to
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near
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 70%.As
it
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can be noticed in 2017 television and
internet
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the internet
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 were roughly the same
on
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the rate of accessing news ,at 70%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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