The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph depicts
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average
carbon dioxide ( CO2)
release
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per individual in four countries
within
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from
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1967 to 2007.
Overall
,in Portugal and Italy
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the release of CO2 increased during the
period
of 1967 to 2007
while
in United Kindom the amount was reduced gradually during
this
period
.
However
, in
the
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Sweden within the first
decade
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the CO2 emission
was
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increased followed by a decline
thereafter
. In detail, United Kindom
was
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emited
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emitted
nearly 11 metric
tons
of CO2 during the
year
1967 and compared to other countries it is the highest amount per that
year
and for the whole
graphted
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graphed
time
period
.
Whearas
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Whereas
, in 1967 Portugal released only one metric ton of CO2 and
that is
the least amount per that
year
and the whole
graphted
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graphed
period
. In Italy , during the
year
1967
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1967,
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just above 4 metric
tons
of CO2 was
emited
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emitted
and that level increased markedly within the next 10 years to achieve a level
around
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6.5 metric
tons
of CO2 in 1977 .
Thereafter
, it again increased slightly during the next two
decade
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decades
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to record approximately 7.5 Metric
tons
in the
year
1997 and that level was maintained during the
last
ten years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
Vocabulary: Replace the words co, period, tons, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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