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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph depicts
avarage
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average
 carbon dioxide ( CO2)
release
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released
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 per individual in four countries
within
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from
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 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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,in Portugal and Italy
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,
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the release of CO2 increased during the
period
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 of 1967 to 2007
while
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 in United Kindom the amount was reduced gradually during
this
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period
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.
However
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, in
the
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apply
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Sweden within the first
decade
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decade,
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 the CO2 emission
was
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apply
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increased followed by a decline
thereafter
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. In detail, United Kindom
was
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emited
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emitted
 nearly 11 metric
tons
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 of CO2 during the
year
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 1967 and compared to other countries it is the highest amount per that
year
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 and for the whole
graphted
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graphed
 time
period
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.
Whearas
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Whereas
, in 1967 Portugal released only one metric ton of CO2 and
that is
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 the least amount per that
year
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 and the whole
graphted
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graphed
period
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. In Italy , during the
year
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1967
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1967,
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 just above 4 metric
tons
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 of CO2 was
emited
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emitted
 and that level increased markedly within the next 10 years to achieve a level
around
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of around
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 6.5 metric
tons
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 of CO2 in 1977 .
Thereafter
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 , it again increased slightly during the next two
decade
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decades
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 to record approximately 7.5 Metric
tons
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 in the
year
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 1997 and that level was maintained during the
last
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 ten years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, period, tons, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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