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The line graphs illustrates average costs of “high-tech gadgets” in Somecountry.

The line graphs illustrates average costs of “high-tech gadgets” in Somecountry.
The line graphs
illustrates
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illustrate
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average
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the average
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 costs of “high-tech gadgets” in Somecountry.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that both the
lines
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 graphs show similar trends.
However
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, the navigation system started higher compared to
smart phone
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smartphone
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. Regarding the navigation system, the
graph
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 started at approximately 3900 US
dollars
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 and declined by 700 US
dollars
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. The
graph
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 continued to decrease and dropped by 100 US
dollars
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 and reached
at
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apply
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3100 US
dollars
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 in 2005 Jul-Dec. It started to rise at 3400 US
dollars
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 in 2006 Jan-June before dropping to its lowest point at 2700 US
dollars
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 in 2006 Jul-Dec.
On the other hand
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, the average
prices
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price
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 of smart phone only started at 3100 US
dollars
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. The
graph
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 slightly decreased by 300 US
dollars
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 in 2005 Jan-June.
This
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 drop is followed by a slight increase
by
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of
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 100 US
dollars
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 before dropping to 2700 US
dollars
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 in 2006 Jan-June. The
graph
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 remained stable until the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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