You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine. For someone to live with a family for 6 months and look after their 6 years old child. Write a letter to the parents. explain why you would like the job give details of why you should be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Dear sir or Madam,

Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter to express my interest in
job
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the job
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which you have posted in an American magazine. I like to
work
as
nanny
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because I love
children
. I always enjoy with them
while
playing, feeding food to them or doing their
work
with maintaining cleanliness. I think I am
perfect
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the perfect
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candidate for
this
job because I
also
have experience of 1 year as
Nanny
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. I can handle
children
very well. I
also
know about what we have to give to
children
at
this
age or how to keep them safe and entertain them with funny games. In
this
way,
children
did
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not miss their parents when they are
on
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work
.  I am
international
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student here and I did not have much time to
work
for
8
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-
10 hours
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10-hour
shift as I am
also
going to
college
for my studies. Currently, I am living in Brampton and my
college
is in Toronto so that's why
i
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am moving to Toronto. From there, it will be easier for me to go
college
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on time. I was
also
working as Nanny in my
neighborhood
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, so, I have
experience
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too. I have my
college
in
day
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time and as you already told me that you are working
night
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shift. So, I will look after your
children
when you are not home.
This
looks good for both of us. If you need,
then
I will
also
provide
reference
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letter from my previous owner. I am excited to
hearing
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back from you. Thank you. Your's sincerely, Mohit
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or aspect of your application. This will help improve the logical flow of your letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting should be formal when addressing unknown individuals in this context. Use 'Dear Sir/Madam,' to maintain a proper and respectful tone.
task achievement
Ensure that you address all the points mentioned in the task effectively. Explicitly mention your enthusiasm for the opportunity, your qualifications, and how you plan to spend your free time in Australia in distinct sections of your letter.
task achievement
Although your tone is generally suitable, be cautious about being too informal in such applications. Maintain a balance between showing enthusiasm and professionalism.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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