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The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
The given bar chart indicates the
proportion
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 of overweight Australian men and
women
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 over the period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010. It can be seen from the chart that the
proportion
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 of overweight males in
Australia
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 experienced a different trend over 3 decades, from 1980 to 2010.
However
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, the figures for
women
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 have gradually increased over
this
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 period. In terms of the percentages of overweight rates in
Australia
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, there was a significant increase in men between 1980 and 2000, from about 40% to over 65%. Looking at the data for males, from 2000 to 2010, the
proportion
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 of overweight men decreased slightly from 65% to 61%. Regarding these figures for overweight
women
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, from 1980 to 2010, the
proportion
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 of overweight
women
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 in
Australia
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 increased steadily from 32% to 52%. Since
then
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, the data for overweight
women
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 in
Australia
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 has remained constant at 52% over the 10-year period from 2000 to 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, women, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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