The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
The shown bar graph describes the percentage of overweight Australian
men
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and
women
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over a period of 40 years between 1980 and 2010. As the graph shows, the number of overweight
men
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was higher than
those
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in
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of
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women
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.
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the figure for
women
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increased gradually over the period. Looking at the picture more closely, one can see that the data for
men
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stood at 40% in 1980. During the period from 1980 to 2000, there was a gradual increase in the overweight Australian
men
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from 40% to over 60%,
then
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this
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data fell slightly from approximately 65% to over 60% in the following year. The overweight Australian
women
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was
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stood at over 30% in 1980.
Then
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this
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data increased gradually between 1980 and 2000,
then
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unchanged
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remained unchanged
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in
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for
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over 50%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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