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The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
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The bar chart represents the proportion of overweight Australian men and women over a 30-year period between 1980 and 2010. As can be clearly seen from the graph, the number of people who were overweight
increase
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 slightly and the percentages of overweight Australian males higher than females In terms of Men, the overheavy males increased from 40% to more than 60% between 1980 and 2000. During the period from 2000 to 2010, there was a slight decrease from over 60% to approximately 60%. Regarding the figure for Women, the weighty Australian females experienced a went up from over 30% to more than 50% between 1980 and 1980 and the following year
this
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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