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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given maps illustrate
todays
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today's
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 layout of a
suburb
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suburban
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 area named Islip
,
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apply
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and its proposed progression
plan
.
Overall
, with the new
plan
 many
infarstructure
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infrastructure
 facilities will be introduced to the Islip town. Which include new
road ways
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roadways
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, new shopping centers and new housing.
However
, some previous facilities will
be remained
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remain
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 the same or relocated with the upcoming
plan
while
 ,some may be abolished or diminished with it. In detail, a circular road with dual carriageways
centering
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centring
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 the main facilities will be
constracted
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constructed
 with the new development ,and the main road which is going West to the East, across the town will be converted to a
pedestrian only
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pedestrian-only
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 path, with the
porposed
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proposed
plan
. The school situated Southwest of the city will
be remained
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remain
have remained
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 unchanged and the housing East
to
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of
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 the school will
also
be remain
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remain
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 the same.
Although
,
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apply
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park
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the park
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 will be kept
at
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in
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 the same place it will be reduced in area
copmared
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compared
 to the
presentday
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present day
present-day
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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