Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

What students should
study
in university has been a long debate among people. Many people believe that students should devote themselves
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gathering
knowledge
apart from major
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,
while
others believe that
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should concentrate on major subjects to become qualified. In my opinion,
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mostly support that it is important to
study
as much as possible by keeping perfect major
subject
knowledge
. On the one hand, by studying additional
subject
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a
student
can enrich his
knowledge
, which is very important in
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.
Furthermore
, information on other subjects makes a
student
to
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think
about out
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of the box,
that
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is always helpful for society and human
being
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.
Moreover
, if a
student
remain
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busy
on
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acquiring
knowledge
,
then
it is easy for him to keep himself away from bad activities.
Finally
, it is not possible to get
good
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Job only by depending on
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major
subject
.
For instance
, presently all the job
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On the other hand
, there are multiple reasons why people argue that
student
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students
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should be
attentive
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more attentive
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on
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study
more and more
Firstly
, paying attention
on
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study
makes a
student
specialized, which is mostly important
on
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technical jobs like
doctor
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,
engineer
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etc.
For instance
,
mechanical
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engineers
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engineer
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should have
depth
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an in-depth
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ideas
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idea
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on
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the engineering
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engineering
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field, which may lead to
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a
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good innovation.
Secondly
, concentration on so many things does not bring good
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always, rather sometimes it makes a
student
puzzle and becomes less confident.
To conclude
, putting
main
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study
as the top
most
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Priority list students
also
should
the
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to
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find other
the
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resources, where they can gain information so that they can enhance their depth of
knowledge
.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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  • Future job prospects
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