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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given pie chart illustrates key facts behind the
less
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productiveness
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 of farm
lands
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land
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 and the table describes the the way, how above
reasons
 affected three areas of the globe in
1990s
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 .
Overall
, deforestation , over-cultivation and
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over-grazing are the main
reasons
 for the plantable
land
 reduction.
However
,
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this
 data Europe has
mostly
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 affected
from
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 the above
reasons
 compared to
the
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North America and Oceania. In detail,
Over
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 gazing is the main reason for the cultivativation
land
 demolition with a recorded 35% valve.
However
,
over cultivation
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 and
the
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deforestation
also
 goes with near taly with 28% and 30% to the
over grazing
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overgrazing
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.
Where as
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 other
reasons
responsible
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 for a minor fraction with
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ploted
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plotted
 7% valve . North America , reveals the least amount of degradation of the
land
 compared to the other two regions ,with only 5%
from
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total
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land
 area.
Although
, in
Oceania
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Oceania,
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 total
land
 degradation is 13% ,
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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 seems not a causative factor for it as
its
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it is
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 0 % in
recorded
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 valve.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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