You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In my letter: •Say why he/she will not enjoy going to college •Explain why getting a job is a good idea •Suggest the type of job that would be suitable
Dear Gulsanam
I
recieved
your letter. I am fine and I hope you doing great. Nice to hear from you after Correct your spelling
received
such
a long time. I appreciate that you are asking my opinion on deciding whether going to college is best for you or getting a job and I am writing to tell you why.
First of Linking Words
all
we have known each other since we were 9 years old. I know your character and Add a comma
all,
behavior
. You don't need to spend your time Change the spelling
behaviour
to
college. The best way to achieve your dreams is to get a job. I know you well you are an active girl. You can not just sit in theoretical classes take notes memorize them and pass exams. You like to experience them actively and freely.
Change preposition
in
Linking Words
Furthermore
you just told me that you want to leave your Add a comma
Furthermore,
parents
house and live a life that you want in freedom. So it is the best time to work and profit.
The Change noun form
parent's
parents'
last
thing I think you should work in music. Because since I Linking Words
known
you had a talent for singing. You're voice is Add the auxiliary verb
knew
have known
angel
. Whenever Add an article
an angel
music
lesson started you sang more than two Correct article usage
the music
music's
it made me happy, when I heard you're voice tones. That's why you should teach singing to students who are interested in singing songs, Change noun form
songs
while
Linking Words
also
having a part-time job as a singer in restaurants or bars.
I hope my suggestion Linking Words
would
help you decide what is best for you.
Yours sincerely
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will
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your argument is clearly structured, dividing it into paragraphs that each discuss a single aspect of your advice. Transition sentences can improve the flow between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal which is good. However, try to use a consistent formal tone throughout the letter for better effect.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task effectively. Include more specific advice and examples to support your points, ensuring a complete response to your friend's query.
task achievement
Adopt a formal tone suitable for a letter. Avoid overly casual language and ensure your advice feels professional and thoughtful.