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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Sample 54 - bricks manufacturing process

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » Sample 54 - bricks manufacturing process
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Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to the manufacture of
builiding
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building
bricks
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.
Overall
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, it is a simple process, commencing with digging the
clay
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 and moving through
severals
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several
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 mechanical stages to terminate with
bricls
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bricks
prices
 which are ready for
delivering
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. The initial phase focuses on forming the
bricks
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. The procedure
stars
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starts
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 with digging a specific
clay
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 with the help of a machine called
digger
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a digger
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.
Next,
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the
clay
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 is filtered using
metal
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a metal
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 grid before being put in a roller.
Following
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this
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 step, sand and water are added
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to
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into
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to
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 the
clay
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. The phase ends when raw
bricks
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 are shaped either by using moulds or using wire
cutter
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cutters
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. moving onto the subsequent
stafe
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stage
 of producing
bricks
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, the raw
bricls
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bricks
 from
prior
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the prior
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 step are
then
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 put in an oven in order to dry
from
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for
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 24 to 48 hours.
After
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this
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 stage is completed,
bricks
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 are
placedin
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placed in
placed
kiln
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a kiln
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 with
moderate
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a moderate
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 temperature ( 200
degree
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degrees
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- 980
degree
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degrees
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) and continuously turned to high temperature from 870 to 1300 degree Celsius.
By
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During
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this
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 step, the
bricks
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 are cooled
between
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for between
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 48 and 72 hours in a cooling chamber. The
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whole
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while
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whole
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 process terminates with packaging
bricks
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 before using
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them with
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with
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for
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 building purposes

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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