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The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart
illustrate
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 the number of
students
 per
class
 in four
states
 of
Australia
 namely ,
Australian
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the Australian
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 capital territory ,Western
Australia
 New South Wales, and South
Australia
.
overall
 ,each of the given
States
 has has different
class
size
 but the most effective
class
size
 of 21 - 25
student
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students
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 is majorly followed by schools of
Australian
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the Australian
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capital territory
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Capital Territory
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 (ACT). The
least
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last
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classes
 have a
class
size
 of more than 30
students
 in all the given
states
. In ACT, a 5th of
classes
 have 20 or fewer
students
 per
class
. More than
a
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apply
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half (51% )
classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
size
 of 21 - 25
students
 just over a quarter
classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
size
 of 26 - 30
students
.
Classes
 having 30 or more
students
 per
class
 at the least (2%) . Western
australia
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Australia
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 follows are similar trend. 43 %
classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
size
 of 21 - 25
students
,
whereas
 almost
the
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a
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 quarter
classes
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of classes
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 have less than 20
students
 or 26 - 30
student
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students
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 per
class
. In New South Wales, more
classes
 have 20
students
 or fewer per
class
 than in the other three
states
.
Two fifths
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Two-fifths
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 of the
classes
 have a
class
size
 of 20 or less than 20. Nearly a third
classes
,
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apply
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 have a
class
size
 of 26 -30 or 21 - 25
students
. In South
Australia
, the maximum( 44%)
classes
 have 26 -30
students
 per
class
. 30%
classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
size
 of 20 or less than 20. 21 - 25
students
 /
class
 are there in just under a quarter of
classes
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, class, states, australia, size, classes with synonyms.
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