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The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the class size of four states of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
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 the number of
students
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 per
class
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 in four
states
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 of
Australia
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 namely ,
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 capital territory ,Western
Australia
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 New South Wales, and South
Australia
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.
overall
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 ,each of the given
States
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 has has different
class
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size
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 but the most effective
class
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size
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 of 21 - 25
student
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students
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 is majorly followed by schools of
Australian
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the Australian
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capital territory
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Capital Territory
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 (ACT). The
least
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last
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classes
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 have a
class
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size
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 of more than 30
students
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 in all the given
states
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. In ACT, a 5th of
classes
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 have 20 or fewer
students
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class
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a
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half (51% )
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classes
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 have a
class
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size
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 of 21 - 25
students
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 just over a quarter
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classes
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 have a
class
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size
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 of 26 - 30
students
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 having 30 or more
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 per
class
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 at the least (2%) . Western
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australia
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 follows are similar trend. 43 %
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classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
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size
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 of 21 - 25
students
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,
whereas
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 almost
the
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 quarter
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classes
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of classes
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 have less than 20
students
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 or 26 - 30
student
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students
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 per
class
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. In New South Wales, more
classes
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 have 20
students
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 or fewer per
class
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 than in the other three
states
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Two fifths
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 of the
classes
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 have a
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size
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 of 20 or less than 20. Nearly a third
classes
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,
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 have a
class
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size
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 of 26 -30 or 21 - 25
students
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. In South
Australia
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, the maximum( 44%)
classes
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 have 26 -30
students
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 per
class
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. 30%
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classes
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of classes
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 have a
class
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size
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 of 20 or less than 20. 21 - 25
students
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 /
class
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 are there in just under a quarter of
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, class, states, australia, size, classes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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