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You have been invited to attend an interview for a place on a course of study at a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot go to the interview at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admissions tutor. In your letter explain why you cannot keep the appointment apologise and offer to arrange a new appointment ask how long the interview will be, and whether there will be any tests during it You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 email finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing
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 email to inform you
some
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 concerns about the
interview
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 that I
supposed
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 to attend
in
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the
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apply
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next
week
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 as a prerequisite
of
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 placement in the Master of Business Administration course at your prominent college in Canada.
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, I am over the moon as I am going to pursue my higher education in your esteemed educational institution and I got the appointment
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to
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 appear in an
interview
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 in the next
week
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, particularly the first
week
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 of March. Unfortunately, I am unable to attend
in
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 prescheduled
interview
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 session as my wife is travelling to Canada next
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 and
for
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due to
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this
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these
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 unavoidable circumstances, it is difficult for me to keep the appointment in the same
week
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.
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, I am extremely
appologised
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apologised
 for
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 unexpected situation and I would like to request you to change
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 prescheduled appointment.
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, the second
week
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 of March will be suitable for me to
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 the
interview
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 session.
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, appreciate
if
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it if
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 you let me know the duration of
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interview
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 session and please let me know if there is any test that I need to attend during the
interview
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. I hope you will consider my situation in a positive way and I look forward to hearing from you soon regarding
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Thomas Nicko

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coherence cohesion
Your letter is structured logically, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. However, improving the flow between ideas and making transitions smoother can enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal, well done. This matches the expected tone of such a letter.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. While your letter does address the points required, clearer separations and focus in paragraphs would improve clarity.
task achievement
You have responded to all parts of the task, providing reasons for not attending the interview, apologizing, requesting a new date, and asking about the interview details. Including more detail about why you cannot reschedule your existing appointment could make your response more convincing.
task achievement
The writing tone is mostly suitable for formal correspondence, though it sometimes becomes slightly informal. Pay attention to maintaining a formal tone consistently throughout the letter.
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