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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of a bus company's performance in terms of actual and
target
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punctuality
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along with
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complaints
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 from passengers. From 1999 to 2003. From an
overall
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 perspective,
target
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punctuality
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 was higher proportion than actual
service
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 of
punctuality
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while
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complaints
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were
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increased from
beginning
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the beginning
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 of the
year
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 to until end of the
year
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. In detail, in 1999,
target
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punctuality
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 was higher than providing
service
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 ilof actually, which accounts for 86 per
cent
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then
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 next
year
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, there was a dramatic difference between
target
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 and actual
punctuality
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, at 86
percentage
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per cent
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 and 82 per
cent
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 respectively. these two years
target
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 of providing
service
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 on time was the same number. In 2000,
target
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punctuality
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had
Verb problem
was
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 85 per
cent
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while
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 actual
service
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 on time
had
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was
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 83
percentage
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per cent
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. In 2002, the bus company
maintain
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maintained
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 the same
target
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, which was 85 per
cent
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 but actual
punctuality
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 was reduced as compared to the previous
year
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, at 84 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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, actual
punctuality
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was
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apply
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dominated the
target
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punctuality
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, which accounts for around 84 per
cent
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 and 83 per
cent
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 respectively.
Furthermore
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,
complaints
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 from passengers in 1999, just 70
then
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 it
was
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apply
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increased by 100 in 2000.
On the contrary
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,
complaints
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was
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were
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 reduced slightly, which was 82. From 2000 to 2003,
complaints
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was
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apply
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increased from 110
to120
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to 120
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words target, punctuality, complaints, service, year, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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