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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph line provides information on the
population
 volume in Asian Countries for 5 decades and illustrates the forecast for 20 years ahead.
Overall
, the
population
 in all Asian Countries fluctuated from the beginning to 2020.
On the other hand
, the forecast for each
population
 (Philippines,
Thailand
, Malaysia and
Indonesia
) in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2030 and 2040 grows steadily. Regarding the data,
Thailand
 and
Indonesia
 had similar growth from
year
 1970 until 1990,
reach
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 around 5% - 10% up. In
year
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 2000, the
population
 of
Thailand
 and
Indonesia
 had
same
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the same
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 percentage which
is
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was
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 28%.
Indonesia
’s
population
increase
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has increased
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 rapidly since
year
 2010 to 40 years ahead and the growth of
Thailand
’s
population
growth
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has grown
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 too
but
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slowly.
However
, Malaysia’s and
Philippines’s
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the Philippines’s
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population
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populations
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 were the highest among
another country
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other countries
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 from 1970 to
year
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the year
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 2000. The condition changed in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2010 and 2020,
Indonesia
 was the
runner up
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runner-up
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 of the
population
and
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apply
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followed by
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, thailand, indonesia, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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