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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the method
electric
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power
 generation in a hydroelectric
power
 station.
Overall
, the process is self-sufficient
energey
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energy
 production , and the river
water
 stored in a
high
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high-level
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level
reserviore
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reservoir
reservoirs
 is used to produce
electricity
 via a rotation of a turbine in a lower
level
at
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in
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the
day
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daytime
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time
 and, at night the generated
electricity
 is utilized to pump collected
water
 into the
high
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high-level
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level
 reservoir again. First of all, river
water
 is stored in a
high
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high-level
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level
reservior
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reservoir
 by a dam,and via
a
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 intake valve which is open
at
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in
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 the
day
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daytime
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time
 ,
water
is flowed
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flows
has flowed
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 through a pipe to a lower
level
 turbine in the
power
 station, and the activated generator is created
electricity
 ,and from
power
lines
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this
 current is transmitted to the national grid. The used
water
 is stored in a low-
level
 reservoir in the
day
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daytime
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time
. At night, the intake at the higher
reservior
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reservoir
 is closed to prevent
water
 flow from it,
while
 the reversible turbine is operated as a
water
 pump to pump
low
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low-level
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level
resorvoir
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reservoir
 collected
water
 to
high
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high-level
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level
 storage, and the
day
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daytime
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time
 generated
electricity
 is used to operate the
water
 pump.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, level, electricity, day, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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