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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The three pie charts provide the data on average consumption of
food
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 in the world in 2008 in comparison with two countries; China and India.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be clearly seen within the charts that processed
food
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 is the highest consumption
food
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, followed by vegetables and fruits. Meanwhile, animal
food
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 and nuts and seeds were the third and fourth respectively. Looking at the charts in more detail,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • average consumption
  • worldwide
  • data
  • comparison
  • differences
  • similarities
  • food items
  • categories
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • majority
  • minority
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