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The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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,
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 enumerates the
number
 of
books
 rented for a period of 12
months
 in a British local library. In 2009, in the first
month
 of the year, the
number
 of rented
books
 is 10,
wich
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which
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 is almost double if we compare
with
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it with
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 the next two
months
, when the
number
 of rented
books
 is 6 and respectively 7.
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 next four
month
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months
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 the
number
 of
books
 is very close,
reached
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reaching
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 15 in May and July,
and
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13
April
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 and 14
June
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in June
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. Moving forward, in the first six
months
 of the year 2009, the
number
 of rented
books
, can not go more than 15 pieces, but just two
months
 after, in August, the library reached
the
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20
books
,
wich
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which
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 is exactly double if we compare with the
fisrt
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first
month
.
The
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In the
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 next three
months
 the
number
 of
books
 suffer a decline, from 20
books
 in August,
with
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to
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 9
books
 just three
monts
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months
 later.
The
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last
month
 of the year, in
december
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December
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, the
number
 of rented
books
reach
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reached
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 the top with 21 rented
books
, more than
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the fisrt
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fisrt
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first
 two
months
tougheter
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together
 and the most rented
books
also
 in the
last
month
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, months, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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