The table below shows the television viewing figures for sports by country, in millions

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The table illustrates the television viewing figures for

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different countries

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.the most popular country with television is

tennis

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followed

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golf

and athletic and motor reading

however

the figures

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first with the USA

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Australia and Canada .

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USA .

golf

is viewed

sports

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number

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sports

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meanwhile

tennis

and motor racing have (

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7 and

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respectively

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people

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people

view

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sports

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tennis

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people

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Athletics and

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(4.5 and 2.8 )

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. Australia.

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is viewed by 6.2

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people

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people

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